Monday, February 20, 2012

What do you say about the story?

hi i am writing a story here it is brief



well its of a guy Cody Evans who shifts to an new town then to his new school his new school trusty is being arrested for drugs scandal, so he goes to a new one where he makes four friends they enjoy the school rife play pranks, get wounds in short they enjoy the school life, they have a favourite bugger shop suddenly their principal leaves the school and a new one comes, they suspect the principal that he is doing something wrong,



They follow him and finds that he is dealing with drugs, they somehow again follow him through a secret tunnel to catch him red handed using a handicam and it is reviled that their favorite burger shop is an office for the dealers and their and their friend George who is the owner of the shop is also invoked in drugs, they are caught by two member of gang but they somehow escape and they decide to run form their and tell the police, when they run they find that their new principal as well

as George are working for CBI and have disguised themselves as the drugs dealers to catch their boss but hey are unable to find it, but then the gang remember that something might be recorded in the hanidicam so they show the video to George and new principal and catch the boss of the drug dealers.He is the bro of trusty how was caught eariler At last the gang becomes famous in newspapers and TVs, at last they go their home as their year is completed



how is the story please tell me can it be enjoyed???What do you say about the story?
Not bad, assuming you're just learning English and know very little about spelling. grammar and syntax!
Too many somehows and somethings. I think you have to be more specific. A bit more attention to grammar would not go amiss either.What do you say about the story?
creative
No, too clich茅. Also, the grammar isn't great. I don't think you could write a good story from that.What do you say about the story?
Not really, but, hey maybe it's just me.

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